Original beautiful art in picture below is created by my very dear and talented friend Rhonda L.Hall !
Prose prompt
Peace blooms..
Pace of patience cultivate!
Peace blooms..
Pace of patience cultivate!
The Height of Haiku Challenge, Day 15 - Prompt #73 - Patience
Perfect, isn;t it.. well done..
ReplyDeleteI like this very much. It is a unique and fine take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteMelanie
We do need it to keep up with the prompts' pace Rach...:)
ReplyDeleteInteresting take, reminds me of a sort of peace garden :) You have eleven syllables, but perhaps it would be more effective if you layed it out in the 3-5-3 format. Compare and see what you think:
ReplyDeleteProse prompt peace
blooms...pace of patience
Cultivate
It as a different feel to it, though not necessarily a better one. Just some humble feedback. Feel free to disagree :)
very sweet! even the edit suggested by wordcoaster is nice..
ReplyDelete@ Ramesh Sood
ReplyDeleteGlad your found this one as nice one...believe me it wasn't an easy attempt ;)
@ Melanie
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting the post...find this one quite interesting!!! Feel so good!!
Wordcoaster
ReplyDeleteThank So much for your thoughts over the post. I'm still trying to figure out the whole of Haiku concept. I truly appreciate your ideas and shall work over it in future haiku post!!!
Thank you ones again!!
~Keep the Spark ALive..
@ Leo
ReplyDeleteTons of Thanks to u..for introducing me to this form of writing!!
I owe this attempt to U :))
~Keep the Spark ALive..
Love this haiku, and that artwork of Rhonda's is wonderful. Great combo!
ReplyDeleteThis is creative writing for the patience.This writing with picture give thousands of expressions.It is really incomparable.Thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteDear Rachana, How happy I am to see that you are writing Haiku, and so creatively! Your work is lovely. And am so proud that you chose my artwork to reflect your words. Thank you, my sweet friend! Would love to see more of your Haiku verses. Love, Rhonda
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